How's my rap? for a begginer?

pretty good, I don't rap but I observe how a lot of rappers construct their lyrics. Try not to rhyme things so closely together try making a more detailed sentence about something THEN rhyming it. Also, it doesn't have to rhyme exactly the same it can be something like this "I smile and Im pleasant, the weed is the essence" this is from "Kid Cudi-Cudderisback". The ess in pleasant and essence have the same sound but the words don't rhyme they kind of flow you know what I mean?? Anyway I know I don't rap at all but it looks real good for you